come here skyfang

[shadowfur]

hey skyfang, il help you become a better grammer and building sentances ok?, based on the bio youve made, i can tell youve never done anything like this before


we will start with building sentances

make the words i put in red into a descriptive sentace to describe what i put in red so pplz know how your cats feeling or what he is doing without having to say it, for example

FrozenFang is angry <NOOO

FrozenFang hissed, his teeth were bared and at that moment he would attack any cat apart if they dared to come neer him. FrozenFangs claws were unsheathed and they clawed into the ground< yes

ok so now for you

It was cold<AH ok skyfang, turn that bad stuff into a descriptive sentance or two

[Laughing Guest]

Sorry, hun. But maybe you shouldn't be giving the lesson. You yourself need some serious help with grammar, spelling, and writing in general.

Edited by me, with brackets [ ];

[H]hey skyfang, [I'll]il help you become a[<out of place] better [with] grammer and building senta[e]nces ok?,[<out of place] based on the bio youv[']e made, i can tell you[']ve never done anything like this before[.]


[W]we will start with building senta[e]nces[.]

[M]make the words i put in red into a descriptive sentace[sentence] to describe what i put in red[,] [FRAGMENT, repetitive] so pplz[Chat speak is gay. People] know how your cat[']s feeling or what he is doing without having to say it,[;] for example[;]

Frozen[f]ang is angry[.] <NOOO

Frozen[f]Fang hissed, his teeth were bared and at that moment he would attack any cat apart if they dared to come neer him. Frozen[f]Fang[']s claws were unsheathed[,] and they clawed into the ground[.] [Another sentence that doesn't make sense.] < yes

[O]ok so now for you[;]

It was cold[.] <AH [O]ok skyfang, turn that bad stuff into a descriptive sent[e]ance or two[.]


Yeah, pretty crappy. You should leave the real admins of this website to doing the teaching, because you surely don't know what you're talking about. And it's extremely rude to post this in public. Something like this should be carried out in PM, because it might embarrass Skyfang. Maybe it wouldn't, but you still shouldn't litter this beautiful forum with this... crap.

Speaking of which, this is a lovely site. The skin is very enticing.

So that's all. Thought you should know that playing teacher isn't a good thing for you to be doing, Shadowfur.

[K a r m a]

Shadow, maybe Laughing Guest is right. First of all, Skyfang didn't even ask for your help, so you had no right to butt in like this. Second of all, look at all the grammatical errors you made!! As you can see, you have a little trouble with spelling and grammar yourself, but I didn't say anything about it, did I? That would have upset you, as you might have upset Skyfang. Lastly, maybe you should have put this in a PM instead of making it public like this.

And Laughing Guest, I'm glad you liked the skin!! ^^

[shadowfur]

>_> sorry i just saw the bio and wich i loved how he described his cat, and it just bugged me with the...you know, how he built sentances, im was justy saying, the rp example made my head spin

[skyfang]

look at my bio now and you were right this is my first time on a rpg site.

[K a r m a]

Shadow- I can't believe how incredibly rude I've been. You were only trying to help after all. Every now and then, I get a little crabby because.. Well.. I've got no idea why. Anyways, I tend to say too much when I'm like that, you should never listen to me. To tell you the truth, I felt that way about the RP example too. ><

Sky- Your bio's fine now, I'll accept it in a second. And that's alright, I never really decided on this site's RP level, but I would say that at the moment, it's for beginners as well as intermediates. I think in time you will get much better, it just takes a little practice.

[skyfang]

Thank you Karma and Shadow

[shadowfur]

, i really just LOVVVEE how you describe cats skyfang

[skyfang]

thanks

[shadowfur]

)))